I will go through this as I would to assign skills and comments.
>Laeg mac Gabra, the educated eldest son of a Jonating mountain
chieftain, is a >Humakt devotee.
Word total: As I GM I would ask for educated to be replaced with a more specific term. Did you mean literate?
Attributes: Devoted to Humakt, Jonating Mountain Culture, Read/Write Jonating
>He scorns magic.
Word total: 19
Attributes: Flaw - Scorn magic
>He bears the Blackiron Sword, which ignores magic.
Word total: 27
Attributes: Blackiron Sword (Ignores magic, rank 5)
>His black iron arms, armor and shield are frightful to behold.
Word total: 38
Attributes: Frightening, Black Iron armour (Rank 5)
>He is famous for his black javelins and his skill with them.
Word total: 50
Attributes: Black Javelins (rank 3), Throw Javelin
>He is an instinctive swordsman with great reflexes.
Word Total: 58
Attributes: Close Combat (sword), Great Reflexes
>He was born in Jonatela and has traveled throughout the Lunar Empire,
Dragon Pass, Maniria, and Ralios, where he learned to ride.
Word total: 80
Attributes: Ride horse, Knowledge of Lunar, DP, Manirian, Ralian
geography.
>He was befriended by the Bear people.
Word total: 87
Attributes: Friend of the Bear people.
>He seeks to avenge his family by bringing an end to all Undead.
Word total: 100
Attributes: Vengeance, hate undead.
Final Skills:
Cultural Skills : Jonating Mountain Culture
Knowledge of Jonating Geography 13
Knowledge of Jonating Customs 13
Knowledge of Jonating myths 13
Close Combat (spear/shield) 13
Worship <fill in Jonating pantheon; Orlanth?> 13
Professional Skills:
You did not specifiy any profession in your write-up. Instead of mentioning javelin and sword fighting you should have said that he is a warrior. If you said that....
Close Combat (sword/shield) 17
Javelin 17
Shieldwall fighting 17
Stay awake 17
Spot hidden 17
Boast 17
Brave 17
Religious Skills:
(I do not have my rules here so this is not going to be exact)
Devoted to Humakt 17
Magic: Death (bless corpse, dismiss ghost, slay zombie) 17
Magic: Combat (truesword stroke, fight multiple foes, shield
breaker, weapon breaker, enchant iron) 17
Magic: truth (sense truth, binding oath) 17
Add-on skills:
Read/Write Jonating 13
Frightening 13
Great Reflexes 13
Ride horse 13
Knowledge of Lunar geography 13
Knowledge of DP geography 13
Knowledge of Manirian geography 13
Knowledge of Ralian geography 13 <this is the GM's call for what
that sentence gives, if you want to give language and customs as well
go for it. YGMV>
Friend of the Bear people 13
Vengeance 13
Hate Undead 13
Flaw:
Scorn magic
Equipment:
Blackiron Sword (Ignores magic, rank 5)
Black Iron armour (Rank 5)
Black Javelins (rank 3)
Now on top of this, pick one skill to be at 5w and two skills to be at 1w. You now have a fully functioning HW starting character.
There are ways to tighten up the 100 words (remove second mention to being born in Jonatela for example) but else it is good.
Comments?
Wesley Quadros
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