> First draft. Please send me critiques, suggestions, etc. It's very
> sketchy at the moment.
Feel like alredy heard... But I like it a lot, except perhaps you should try
to inove a little bit, not using so close name, and situation, to make the
story more different. Don't take my comment in count if it was your desire
to stay close to the original one.
Gizmo
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